Do you insult your readers with redundancy? Usually, we see this when an author tells something and then shows it, or vice versa. If you must add more to a wonderful showing sentence, try adding the impact of the event on your character’s emotions.
Combine the following sentences into one magnificent sentence. Want more? Show the emotional impact.
The impact totaled the car and left Amy’s body broken, bruised, and with a collapsed lung. She was in grave physical danger.
Hint: Place a character beside Amy in ICU and show thoughts and feelings. If needed, refer to The Emotion Thesaurus.